Genesis 21 — The Mister Translation
Translator's Notes — verse by verse
Each note explains this translation's choice and compares the seven versions on the shelf. Quotations from copyrighted versions (NIV, TLB, NWT) are kept to short phrases for comparison; KJV, Geneva, Douay-Rheims and ASV are public domain.
Visited — and the laughter lands. "Jehovah visited Sarah" — paqad, the attending-verb that cuts both ways: it visits a son on a barren woman here, and in Jeremiah it "visits" a city's doings upon her — same verb, opposite freight (KJV "visited" with us; the 1917 JPS softens to "remembered"). The birth comes "at the appointed time" — la-moed, the word hung with the lights on day four. And then the name, banked for three chapters, is finally paid: Abraham laughed face-down (17:17); Sarah laughed inside the tent and denied it (18:12-15); now — "Laughter God has made for me" (the Hebrew fronts the word, and so does this translation; KJV "God hath made me to laugh") — and the boy is Yitschaq, "he laughs." One shadow in the sunlight: "everyone who hears will laugh li" — for me, or at me? The preposition is open, and the woman who once laughed in fear knows both readings. Verse 7's "who would have declared" uses a verb (millel) so rare it is nearly a private word — as if ordinary speech had no form for this sentence. The eighth-day circumcision keeps 17:12 at the first opportunity; Abraham is 100.
The boy caught "Isaac-ing." At the weaning feast (two or three years on), Sarah sees the son of Hagar — laughing: metsacheq, the participle of the very verb that names Isaac. Whatever Ishmael was doing, in Hebrew he was doing Isaac — playing the laughter, or playing the heir. The verdicts on the shelf are a spectrum: KJV "mocking"; Douay, from the Vulgate, the gentlest — "playing"; the Septuagint adds "with her son Isaac"; and Paul, reading through his own battles, "persecuted" (Galatians 4:29). This translation prints the neutral surface — laughing — so the pun stays visible, and shelves the verdicts here. Sarah's demand uses the Bible's expulsion-verb: "Drive out" (garesh) — the word that emptied Eden (3:24) and exiled Cain (4:14). Note, too, the vocabulary shift: chapter 16's shifchah (slave-girl) has hardened into amah (slave-woman) — the household's words for Hagar have aged with the trouble.
"Listen to her voice." God's ruling contains a phrase this site has met before, in the garden: shema beqolah — the exact words of 3:17, where "you listened to the voice of your wife" opened the indictment. Here the same phrase is a command: "all that Sarah says to you — listen to her voice." The words that once named a fall now carry the plan forward — "for in Isaac shall seed be called for you" (KJV nearly verbatim) — with the double promise attached: Ishmael too becomes a nation, "for he is your seed."
Dawn, a skin of water, and an arithmetic problem. "Abraham rose early in the morning" — remember the habit; it returns on a far worse morning, one chapter from now. Bread, a skin of water (KJV, delightfully, "a bottle"), "and the child" — and here the honest note: by the book's own numbers (16:16; 21:5, plus a weaning), Ishmael is a teenager, yet the scene reads like a small child — carried, cast under a bush, wept over from a distance. Readers who track the Torah's source-seams hear two tellings braided; harmonizers picture an exhausted sixteen-year-old collapsed in the heat. The seam is shown, not sanded. Hagar wanders the wilderness of Beersheba until the water is finished, casts the child under a bush, and sits "about a bowshot" away — the distance measured, with terrible economy, in the weapon her son will one day master (v20).
The name that happens as a verb. Now notice what the narrator has been doing: in this entire chapter the boy is never once called Ishmael — "the son of Hagar," "the child," "the boy." The name is withheld so that it can happen: "And God heard (shama Elohim) the voice of the boy" — Yishma-El, "God hears," paid as an event, exactly as promised at his announcement (16:11). "There where he is" (ba'asher hu sham) — the rabbis loved that clause: judged where he is, not where he will be. "And God opened her eyes, and she saw a well" — for the woman who named God "the One who sees" (16:13), sight returned as rescue: Hagar's two desert scenes close on the same exchange of seeing. "God was with the boy"; he grows, an archer in Paran; and his mother takes him a wife "from the land of Egypt" — Hagar the Egyptian (16:1), full circle.
Abimelech returns — with a general and a request. The king of Gerar, last seen returning Sarah with a thousand pieces of silver (ch. 20), arrives with Phicol, the commander of his army — a treaty delegation with the muscle standing visibly behind it. His opening line is the chapter's quiet verdict from outside: "God is with you in all that you are doing" — said to the very man whose last appearance in Gerar was a half-truth that nearly wrecked a kingdom. The oath he asks reaches down three generations (nin and nekhed — offspring and posterity, a rare legal pair), invoking the chesed — the covenant-kindness — he showed first. Abraham's answer is two words in Hebrew: "I will swear." Then, business: the seized well. In the Negev, water rights are the real diplomacy, and the narrative gives the dispute more verses than the oath.
Seven ewes, and a name with two readings that are one. Abraham sets seven ewe-lambs apart; Abimelech's acceptance of them is a receipt — "a witness for me that I dug this well": property law by livestock, the Negev's paperwork. And the place-name banks the whole transaction twice over: Be'er Sheva — "well of the seven" and "well of the oath" — because Hebrew's verb "to swear" (nishba) is literally to seven oneself: the two etymologies the text offers (v30, v31) are one word wearing both faces. Beersheba enters the story here and never leaves it — "from Dan to Beersheba" will become the Bible's own way of saying the whole land.
The tamarisk and the fourth El-name. Abraham plants an eshel — a tamarisk, a desert tree that lives for centuries: planting one at a well is filing a claim on the future in slow motion (KJV, following an older guess, "planted a grove"; ASV "a tamarisk tree" with us). And there he calls on the name of Jehovah, El Olam — the Everlasting God: the fourth El-name this site has collected at a landmark — El Elyon at Salem (ch. 14), El Roi at Hagar's first well (ch. 16), El Shaddai at the covenant (ch. 17), now El Olam at a tree beside a sworn well (NWT, keeping its clock, "the indefinitely lasting God"). "The land of the Philistines" carries the standing honesty flag: the Philistines of the archaeological record arrive on this coast centuries after the patriarchs — the narrator, as with "Ur of the Chaldeans," speaks the reader's geography, not Abraham's.
Patterns worth carrying forward
Where this translation sides with the literal shelf: "Jehovah visited Sarah" with the KJV (against JPS's softer "remembered"); "in Isaac shall seed be called" nearly KJV verbatim; "cut a covenant," as always.
Where it goes its own way: "laughing" for metsacheq (KJV "mocking," Douay "playing" — the verdicts shelved in the note, the pun kept visible in the text); "a skin of water" (KJV "a bottle"); "tamarisk" (KJV "grove"); "slave-woman" for amah, kept distinct from chapter 16's shifchah; and "Laughter God has made for me" — the Hebrew's fronting kept.
Echoes paid and planted. Paid: the laughter thread — Abraham's laugh (17:17), Sarah's hidden laugh (18:12), now a name and a song; "listen to her voice" — the phrase of the garden's indictment (3:17), inverted into a command; garesh, the expulsion-verb of Eden and Cain; "God heard" — Ishmael's name, promised at (16:11), paid as an event; eyes opened for the namer of El Roi (16:13); the eighth day, commanded at (17:12) and kept; and Abimelech's arc from the sister-ruse (20:15) closed with a treaty. Planted: "rose early in the morning" — the habit that returns on the worst morning of all (22:3); Beersheba, the patriarchal address from here on; El Olam joining the El-name series; and the bowshot that became an archer.
Next installment in this book: Genesis 22 — the Aqedah: "Take your son, your only one, whom you love…" — the hardest chapter in the book.